tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post3833359562890930260..comments2024-03-29T07:43:01.003+00:00Comments on Help! I Need a Publisher!: SYNOPSIS SPOTLIGHTNicola Morganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12189894289540344094noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-14308398789749957022010-03-26T19:39:18.342+00:002010-03-26T19:39:18.342+00:00A big thanks to everyone who has commented and esp...A big thanks to everyone who has commented and especially Nicola. Really appreciate you help!<br /><br />Some lovely positive feedback on here and I can't wait to get this the best it can be.<br /><br />In response to Nicola's comment about POV switching, there is one chapter in 3rd person from the POV of Blake Edwards and another late in the book in from the POV of Lydia. When I wrote Ameliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11557875134654523412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-41855543259570677952010-03-26T14:29:54.067+00:002010-03-26T14:29:54.067+00:00Hi Siena, What a surprise to bump into you here in...Hi Siena, What a surprise to bump into you here in the world of the Crabbit rather than at EDWG<br /><br />I agree with everyone else - you need to pare it right back. For example you say :<br />"It wasn’t like she expected Lydia to make everything better, empathy wasn’t exactly her forte (not when it wasn’t scripted anyway) and Sophie was used to taking care of things on her own. Her sisterJo Franklinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11863749932391225653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-41661314675396903542010-03-26T09:17:51.020+00:002010-03-26T09:17:51.020+00:00Useful comments, people. I agree that a great deal...Useful comments, people. I agree that a great deal needs to be pared down from this. And the grammar and punctuation need to be perfected.<br /><br />Lynn (behlerblog) is absolutely right about the POVs. If you hadn'e POV switches correctly, this is fine, but from the synopsis it's not clear whether you do. You can SAY in the synopsis how POV switches are effected - eg is it chapter by Nicola Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12189894289540344094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-15850880132411525062010-03-26T01:32:07.550+00:002010-03-26T01:32:07.550+00:00I apologize; those links did not post well, it loo...I apologize; those links did not post well, it looks like. <br /><br />Lisa Gardner's<br />http://www.lisagardner.com/tricks/synopsis.htm<br /><br />Chuck Sambuchino's<br />http://www.guidetoliteraryagents.com/blog/One+Story+You+Need+5+Versions.aspxElizabeth Westhttp://aelizabethwest.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-7095228437355807812010-03-26T01:18:17.915+00:002010-03-26T01:18:17.915+00:00Writer here, unpublished, alas. But I recently fi...Writer here, unpublished, alas. But I recently finished writing four synopses for my book and I've read a lot of YA fiction. <br /><br />The story itself sounds great! It's the kind of thing I might have fantasized about as a teen. The synopsis is a bit wordy; I think you could tighten it up quite a bit. This post on Chuck Sambuchino's blog helped me focus mine: http://Elizabeth Westhttp://aelizabethwest.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-76722559527712029482010-03-25T14:37:32.792+00:002010-03-25T14:37:32.792+00:00Nicola asked for creds; I'm editorial director...Nicola asked for creds; I'm editorial director for a small trade press in the US.<br /><br />Since I'm a Yank, I have little choice but to look at this through that prism.<br /><br />The first thing I noticed is the changing POVs. I would have preferred that you stick to one POV. Reason being is that I think it would help you cut down on the many little details that don't really need Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-5762572149465469512010-03-25T11:47:44.932+00:002010-03-25T11:47:44.932+00:00Also, being an adult, I have never read any YA fic...Also, being an adult, I have never read any YA fiction (and when I was a young adult, that termed hadn't been coined!) But as far as I know, this could be just right for the market it's intended for.<br /><br />My only (constructive, I hope) criticisms would be, that the main points of any tension need to be somehow highlighted more; they seem to blend with the overall synopsis. I mean toDavid John Griffinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01524610087056533062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-90275811288260481292010-03-25T09:53:34.263+00:002010-03-25T09:53:34.263+00:00I'll only comment as an adult male reader of M...I'll only comment as an adult male reader of MG and YA fiction.<br /><br />Being an adult male, this isn't for me, but igniting my inner teen princess for a moment, wow, this sounds GOOD! The dazzle and the dark heart of celebrity, the super-successful sister who is really failing big time, and the chance for everygirl to meet a dreamy screen legend make this sound like a winner to me. <Thomas Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12987047131104943571noreply@blogger.com