tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post6612294682982806220..comments2024-03-28T06:16:39.508+00:00Comments on Help! I Need a Publisher!: Pitch para - Witch, Nun, Shaman's DrumNicola Morganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12189894289540344094noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-69268756768116035262012-06-21T13:30:54.810+01:002012-06-21T13:30:54.810+01:00Once again thanks to all. It's very useful to...Once again thanks to all. It's very useful to have non-pagan perspective on the pitch and I'll be taking into account all your very generous suggestions and advice in any future pitches.<br /><br />Also, thanks to all of you who said that you'd like to read it. The new revised edition is under consideration by a publisher at the moment & I'll let you know how it pans out. Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745199648604340657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-28929872894064345942012-06-18T01:54:52.802+01:002012-06-18T01:54:52.802+01:00I too had a problem with some phrases that I was v...I too had a problem with some phrases that I was very unfamiliar with - this book would be outside the genres that I usually read. I think therefore if you want to entice readers in from as wide a population as possible, perhaps a bit more explanation of the more unusual phrases such as hand-fasting would be useful.Cara Cooperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15972751301677687055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-86401945214839993242012-06-17T21:40:23.197+01:002012-06-17T21:40:23.197+01:00Love the Christian granny more than I can say.
In ...Love the Christian granny more than I can say.<br />In an effort to get as much action in as possible, the pitch maybe fell into listing events instead of a storyteller's telling. Which is I think what Deborah meant in bare bones sacrificing writing flavour. Also, as she says, is it serious or lighter toned?<br />The quest seemed tucked away. Nicola brought it out and made it terrifying. Elizabeth Dunnnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-88556287571080996702012-06-16T22:33:27.110+01:002012-06-16T22:33:27.110+01:00I really like the sound of this novel but the orig...I really like the sound of this novel but the original pitch is too much of a 'telling', relating the bare bones of the plot without giving us the flavour of your writing. Nicola's re-working engaged me instantly, although I have to say I missed the under-cover Christian granny - she made me smile! <br />I think you can rework this so that it gives a clearer insight into the mood of Deborah Jayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18422714772244468627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-656034338673923922012-06-16T18:30:20.096+01:002012-06-16T18:30:20.096+01:00Thank you all so much. I take on board all the hel...Thank you all so much. I take on board all the helpful suggestions and will include them in future pitches. I,m on holiday so not on line a lot but pleqse do keep them coming.I need all the help I can get. Xx CamCameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745199648604340657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-34609054325127329712012-06-15T20:27:36.475+01:002012-06-15T20:27:36.475+01:00This is the type of novel that I would love to rea...This is the type of novel that I would love to read. It wouldn't be easy to write because there is a lot going on at the same time. Good idea. Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-35422696048506834792012-06-15T18:59:24.463+01:002012-06-15T18:59:24.463+01:00I was distracted by the capitalisation of a lot of...I was distracted by the capitalisation of a lot of words that didn't need it - if this goes on in the novel as well, it's going to need fixing. If you google on "what words need capitals" you'll find some useful information.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-6939431000054011872012-06-15T09:54:30.857+01:002012-06-15T09:54:30.857+01:00I wondered about "a woman assassin" too....I wondered about "a woman assassin" too. I did not know which way to read it. <br />Reading it felt as if I had taken a deep breath and galloped to the other end. I think I would rather prowl because it sounds interesting.catdownunderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06959328192182156574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2488887316391780144.post-75907275887023193062012-06-15T08:27:48.840+01:002012-06-15T08:27:48.840+01:00The rewrite adds a sense of rhythm and escalating ...The rewrite adds a sense of rhythm and escalating drama. Hand-fasting could be explained as 'bonding' and shamanic is probably a more common term than shamanistic. I think it's a great premise and what the rewrite has done successfully is to see it from the reader's perspective - what will engage them and keep them turning the pages. I can suggest a couple of magazines to contact DThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803989273524731892noreply@blogger.com