This may be too specific a query below and just say so if it is. But – I’m playing around with finding the heart of the story and using your poor memory thing which is, of course, brilliant. [NB Reference to a method I suggest in Write a Great Synopsis.] At the same time I’m writing down words and associations and finding it all very useful and fascinating as well. I’ve been having a go at the twenty-five word summary! Boy, is that tricky! And I wrote this below. Is it too non specific? I think it’s what my book is about, essentially, but would that sound deeply uninteresting because there’s no detail at all?
‘The Wildes learn that the Cavalieris originate from an advanced Triassic civilization existing underneath Antarctica. When they vanish one evening, subsequent events change their lives.’
I know you’re busy and also that there may be no answer to my question – but I though I’d ask anyway!This 25-word pitch really doesn't work, I'm afraid, mainly for the reason you suggest yourself: that it's too non-specific. For example "subsequent events change their lives" tells us nothing, especially as we don't know what their lives were like to start! After reading it the pitch, I literally know nothing about your book except that some people disappear.
The Wildes learn that the Cavalieris originate from an advanced Triassic civilization existing underneath Antarctica. When they vanish one evening, subsequent events change their lives.
So, more please! More emotional tugs, more concrete hooks for the reader to grasp onto. Who (personality, not names) is this story about and what are the stakes?